There was something in the elderly woman’s grace that caught my eye.

02-22
摘要: 阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
There was something in the elderly woman’s grace that caught
阅读下面材料,根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段,使之构成一篇完整的短文。续写的词数应为150左右。
There was something in the elderly woman’s grace that caught my eye. Although slow and unsure of her steps, the woman moved with deliberation (从容), and there was no hesitation in her gestures.
It was a few years ago, and I had taken a part - time holiday - season job in a video. store at the local shopping mall. From inside the store, I could see the people outside rushing by.
The elderly woman entered the store, along with her daughter, who was displaying a serious case of impatience, rolling her eyes, sighing and checking her watch every few seconds. I guessed if she had possessed a rope, she would have fastened it to her mother to drag her along to keep step with the rush of other shoppers.
The elderly woman separated from her daughter and began to seek through the DVDs on the nearest shelf. After the slightest hesitation, I walked over and asked if I could help her find something. The woman smiled up at me and showed me a title written on an old piece of paper.
Rather than rush off to locate the DVD for the woman, I asked her to walk with me so I could show her where she could find it. Looking back, I thought I wanted to enjoy her company for a moment.
Something about her deliberate movements reminded me of my own mother, who’d passed away the previous Christmas. I missed my mom and still felt regretful about the moments when I’d used my impatience to make her life unhappy.
As we walked along the back of the store, I introduced its floor plan: old television shows, action movies, cartoons, science fiction. The woman seemed glad of the unrushed company and casual conversation.
We found the DVD and she thanked me, saying that it was the one she’d enjoyed when she was her daughter’s age. Unwillingly, I accompanied her to the cash register, realizing I had to return the elderly woman to her daughter, who was still tapping her foot at the front of the store.
Paragraph 1: As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter. __________________________________________
Paragraph 2: Together they made their way toward the store’s exit. ____________________________________________________________________________
【答案】As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter. “Mind some advice?” I asked. She rolled her eyes and said, “of course not.” I smiled to show her I wasn’t criticizing. Cherish her and cherish every single moment you can stay with her,” I said. And then I answered her curious expression by saying, “When she's gone, it's these little moments that will come back to you. Moments like this. I know.” Having finished saying this, I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation back to her daughter.
Together they made their way toward the store's exit. Then the daughter glanced over her elderly mother. And slowly, almost unwillingly, she placed her arm with apparently unaccustomed affection around her mothers’ shoulders and gently guided her back into the crowd. Tears filled my eyes when I watched them disappearing in the crowd.
【解析】
【分析】
这是一篇读后续写作文。
【详解】通过阅读所给文章可知,作者在录像带工作做兼职时,看到了一对母女一起走进了商店。女儿非常不耐烦,而母亲只是从容地选着DVD。看到这里作者想到了自己的母亲,于是在收银台排队时给了女儿一些忠告。
续写部分分为两段,第一段开头是:当那位老妇人在收银台排队时,我走向她的女儿。可知后文应当描写作者和女儿的对话,作者劝告女儿珍惜现在和母亲相处的时刻;第二段开头是:他们一起朝商店的出口走去。后文应当描写听了作者建议的女儿和母亲在一起的表现,她把她的胳膊放在她母亲的肩膀上,带着明显不习惯的感情,轻轻地把她带回到人群中。作者看着消失在人群中,热泪盈眶。
【点睛】本文描写详略得当,使用了高级词汇和高级句子。如:in the queue; criticize, deliberation等高级词汇;时间状语从句As the elderly woman was waiting in the queue at the cash register, I walked over to her daughter.;非谓语动词的运用Having finished saying this, I noticed the elderly woman moving with her deliberation back to her daughter.等高级句式。
 
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