假设你是某中学高二学生李华,经历过许多次成功与失败的你一定有很多感谢的话要对关爱你的人说。恰逢感恩节来临之际,请你根据以下要点给他(她)写一封感谢信。要点如下:

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摘要: 假设你是某中学高二学生李华,经历过许多次成功与失败的你一定有很多感谢的话要对关爱你的人说。恰逢感恩节来临之际,请你根据以下要点给他(她)写一封感谢信。要点如下:
1. 表达感

【分析】
本文是一篇应用文。在感恩节来临之际,给关爱你的人写一封感谢信。
【详解】第一步:审题
体裁:应用文
时态:根据提示,时态应为一般现在时和一般将来时。
结构:总分法
总分法指把主题句作为总说,把支持句作为分说,并以这种方式安排所写内容。
要求:1. 表达感激之情;
2. 回顾对你的帮助;
3. 表达祝愿。
第二步:列提纲(重点词组)
approach; go through; get along well with; occasion
第三步:连词成句
1. With Thanksgiving Day approaching I’m writing to express my sincere gratitude to you both for the things you’ve done for me.
2. I enjoy many successes as well as go through a number of failures, which makes me understand how much effort you have made to bring me up.
3. It is you who first give me encouragement when I deal with difficulties, especially when I am not getting along well with my studies.
4. All in all, I can say nothing but thanks to you both on this special occasion.
根据提示及关键词(组)进行遣词造句,注意主谓一致和时态问题。
第四步:连句成篇(衔接词)
1.表文章结构顺序:First of all, Firstly/First, Secondly, And then, Finally, In the end, At last
2.表并列补充关系:What’s more, Besides, Moreover, Furthermore, In addition As well as, including
3.表转折对比关系:However, On the contrary, but, Although+ clause(从句), In spite of+ n/doing
4.表因果关系:Because, As, So, Thus, Therefore, As a result
连句成文,注意使用恰当的连词进行句子之间的衔接与过渡,书写一定要规范清晰。
第五步:润色修改
【点睛】范文内容完整,要点全面,语言规范,语篇连贯,词数适当,上下文意思连贯,符合逻辑关系。作者在范文中使用了较多主从复合句,如:I enjoy many successes as well as go through a number of failures, which makes me understand how much effort you have made to bring me up.这句话用到了which引导的非限制性定语从句和how引导的宾语从句。此外It is you who first give me encouragement when I deal with difficulties, especially when I am not getting along well with my studies.这句话使用了强调结构和when引导的时间状语从句。此外文章还使用了一些高级表达,如approach; go through; get along well with; occasion等。全文中没有中国式英语的句式,显示了很高的驾驭英语的能力。另外,文章思路清晰、层次分明,上下句转换自然,为文章增色添彩。
 
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